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Jan 10th, 2005 04:58 PM
Jixby Phillips well now you can play it on the radio ;_;
Jan 10th, 2005 04:39 PM
opel very nice stuff
Jan 10th, 2005 12:48 PM
Immortal Goat Glad to have helped.
Jan 10th, 2005 12:03 PM
mburbank There are very few changes, just three in fact. Mock will restore them tonight. 'Bloody' and 'arse' are not from my venacular and I'd never use them in poetry unless I was invoking someoen elses voice.

'One eyed trouser snake', while amusing, renders the sentence meaningless, as idiomatically 'you don't know one eyed trouser snake' doesn't say what I meant it to.

Also, as Goat pointed out, it queers the rythmn.

However, I think the mess up is pretty funny.

Chubuwumba.
Jan 10th, 2005 11:35 AM
Sojourn Excellent work. I see no flaws in something from the heart, or even other areas of the anatomy.
Jan 10th, 2005 10:59 AM
sspadowsky Pretty fuckin' good!

Ain't no Donny Rumsfeld, mind you, but then, who is?

Still, pretty fuckin' good.
Jan 10th, 2005 10:25 AM
mburbank DAMN! Probably a function of the fact I PM'd him these poems.

Thanks for drawing my attention to it, I shall email him the changes.
Jan 10th, 2005 01:55 AM
Immortal Goat Why is even the reular site concoring words? The poems don't flow like they should, especially in the "Popeye's Lament" one. One-eyed troused snake my dick.
Jan 10th, 2005 01:19 AM
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NEW SHORT: "The Poetry of Max Burbank part 2"

Alright hepcats, Max is back with some more street jive for you to get your groove on with. Can you dig? Yyyyyeah...


NEW SHORT: "The Poetry of Max Burbank part 2"
http://www.i-mockery.com/shorts/maxpoems2

Enjoy!

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