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Drew Katsikas Drew Katsikas is offline
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Old Oct 16th, 2003, 07:32 PM       
If I were Glowbelly:

Shit, baby, are you in love, or like cynical
Math is love
x+y=z and love
the end

I personally didn't like that, but mind you I would have something more to say than the above. I thought the dialouge was contrived and corny, and the descriptions and backround info were poorly written. The idea itself was intersting, but there's a 100 other ways the author could have written it without it sucking.


I have an addition to make to my story, but I have writer's block now. It'll explain where the woman came from, and hopefully the whole sun fire things. If you want to read something that is more intelligble, I have something new posted in recomended readings.
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