[Protoclown]

I don't know if I would consider what you wrote here to be a story so much as "a short piece". Honestly, I didn't like it. And here's why:

I didn't see the point. We have two characters arguing over whether or not they like the sun, and there's a dead lady. There really isn't anything of interest happening here, the characters aren't appealing and rather than giving just enough information to wet my appetite and get me curious, you give away so little that I simply don't care. I don't know why there's a dead lady near the campfire, and I'm not particularly interested to learn why. One character likes the sun, one doesn't. Why does that matter?

The dialogue was too similar between the characters, as Glowbelly pointed out, but it also seemed too childish. If the characters are supposed to be children, that's fine, but that wasn't my impression after reading the piece. I personally can't believe that dialogue such as "I wish she was alive. I wish someone would put out this goddamn fire, too. Then the sun would come out and we’d all be happy" could come out of anyone above the age of 11 or with an IQ greater than 80. It's not credible to me that a grown adult would be lamenting the fact that the sun may never come back out again.

The names Bob and Tom...I mean, can it get any more generic? I realize that those are perfectly realistic and reasonable names, but compounded on top of everything else about this story I don't like, the names make it seem even more silly.

I guess what bothers me is that I COMPLETELY fail to see any purpose behind this piece. I don't know why you wrote it or what the reader (or you yourself) is supposed to get out of it. It doesn't give me any conflict, it doesn't provide an interesting character sketch, I don't see any message hidden or otherwise. What was your intention when you wrote it? What were you trying to convey other than "SUN PRETTY!" "NO. FIRE PRETTIER!"?

I apologize for my harshness, after being in a writing group with some english majors and been on the receiving end of some blistering criticism myself, I have come to see the value in having someone give their fully honest opinion, even if it isn't particularly pleasant to hear. I mean no offense, but I don't want to hold back and come at you with the kid gloves just because I don't want to hurt your feelings.