[glowbelly]

i'm such a jerk sometimes. i forgot to tell you that i really like the imagery and your word usage.

my problem with it is the way you have broken up the "sentences." the way i was taught to read poetry is that you don't pause at line breaks, but instead pause at punctuation. it's the same way that you would read a sentence.

so i'm reading the first stanza like this:

A kiss, a bruise to my blue lips caught off guard I step back curious self-doubting I wonder why me be the recipient of such hot tough love. Tough loved by my cloud eyed darling

and then i'm left wondering why the stanza break here, because there it just runs into the next stanza (or at least that's how i'm reading it).

am i making sense to you?