[mburbank]

I am of course pleased with any feedback. I'd suggest, gentle reader, that you concider the name of the site I'm writting for, I-mockery. Not I-serious, not even I-literary-magazine-the-often-publishes-humor-but every-now-and-then-publishes-a-serious-piece.

Or, you could read annything else I've written to and see what the tine seems like.

Or anything by anyone else on the site to see what the site is like.

Or the piece itself. I think you'll find several clues in there that the piece is a comment on 'whiny conglomerations' and that those clues are the parts you find 'incoherent' because they run contrary to what you dedicded the piece was about.

I was never under the impression that every reader would like my work. It is difficult, though, to take very seriously criticism that begins "I'm sorry yo be a prick."