My Written Testimony

[ziggytrix]

You have the makings of several paragraphs there.

1. introduction and apology for failure to appear in person.
2. your recollection of the events, just the facts. (On the night ...)
3. your persuasive argument for why you shouldn't be penalized. (Throughout the ...)
4. your plea for mercy (Regardless of these ...)

If you'd broken it up like that it'd have been easier on the eyes, displayed your thoughts more coherently, and been less of a headache to read. I don't give a fuck about the 4-8 min/max, I'm talking about persausive writing. Which if you wish it to be as effective as possible, should be as clear as possible.

Water under the bridge now, I know, but you DID ask what we thought, and so this is what you get. <shrug>