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Join Date: Dec 2007
Location: Black Books
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Apr 7th, 2008, 09:36 PM
I only got through half of one of Tribes draft, but it was due to time and not a lack of interest. I really like your use of descriptions, and they're really vivid but not overwrought or overdone--like, for instance, the way I write--but you do use a loooooot of commas. They stop the eye somewhat, they're so prolific.
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I'm about to stop playing "Who Should I Kill First" in my head, and go with what feels natural.
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