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[Drew Katsikas]

I liked a lot of it, but I thought the way you highlighted some things was uneeded. With the man speaking about God over the radio, that was a great idea, but I didn't think you needed to add about the bullshit. Just stating what happened would be enough.

I didn't really like the ending, especially the "not surviving myself" part. I thought that was kind of lame. There's alot of potential in the piece, but it seems an apocolyptic story shouldn't be so short. Keep on writing and be sure to utilize all your abilities, some of the techniques you used in there were quite good.