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dipshed
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Join Date: Mar 2003
Location: Chicago, Illinois
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Sep 2nd, 2007, 11:09 AM
You didn't explain who Chojin is in this story (he could be the brother for all we know), the importance of saving money for Grandpap's medication, the Aunt character's leeching of said money, NOR did you even describe anything about the Aunt's tomato venture (the comedic relief). The summary is a foggy mess that barely scratches at the heart of the story.
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I expect better from you! See me after class!
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