Story I wrote

[kellychaos]

Excellent critique Proto. Laying out the metaphors in such a subtle way that's it's not obvious and contrived ... i.e. the reader does not feel as though he's be GIVEN the idea. If it's well written, they form themselves. I DO take offense to Drew's taking Hemingway out of context to explain the author's influence on him. What author ... especially Hemingway with his clipped, blunt prose ... can be summed up and judged by a few sentences? Brevity and conciseness can be an asset when you consider the overall plot, structure, ect of the novels but this cannot be appreciated within the limited framework of an exerpt.