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Asspunch McGruf
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Join Date: Feb 2003
Location: !GNODAB
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Apr 5th, 2003, 01:16 AM
I think you did a good job of making the Goddess a sympathetic figure, but it's kind of anticlimactic at the end. It drops off a little too sharply. If this is a lead-in for a whole novel, I'd leave the closing a bit more "cliffhanger"-ish. But other than that, great job.
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