Not For Mass Consumption Films

[Fathom Zero]

Critical feedback is what I'm good at, so I'll do eet. Your cuts need to be tighter, for the most part. That's going to make the shots feel much more energetic. When it comes to film, every quarter-second counts. Also, you could do away with your title cards altogether. If ya wanted to write a short story, do that. But this is the silver screen! But if you're going for a silent movie feel, you could probably go a bit further with it.

This is just going off of the Attack of the Killer Twig, btw.